Tainted Lime Reviews Issue #36
April 11, 2002
Reviews are archived at http://www.asstr.org/~TaintedLime/.
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Stories reviewed in this issue:
Finally - For the First TIme, by Slippery Quill (* *)
Swimming pool action, by badr (* *)
Private Dancer, by theGreatxIam (* * *)
DOUBLE D's DERRIERE DELIGHT, by Evan Karpel (* *)
I'm Talking To You, by Alan C. McDonald (* * * *)
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{ASSM} (Corrected) Finally - For the First TIme (MF/M, slutwive, creampie, cons, love)
By Slippery Quill <slipperyquill@aol.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35943
Yet another excruciating second person story. In this one, I am
the of a who is watching me make love to another man.
The other comes in my pussy, and then I make love to my
husband.
On occasion, I can stand to read a second person if it
reads like a love letter. But this one is told in present tense,
so it doesn't work as a letter, either.
On the positive side, the author writes grammatically correct
sentences, so if you happen to be the person this is
intended for, you will enjoy this story. If you're not that
person, pass it by.
Rating: * *
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{ASSM} Swimming pool action
By badr <badr42@hotmail.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35957
This breaks every rule in the book. No paragraph breaks, no
grammatically correct sentences, no capital letters, mixed verb
tenses, very few periods, ... You would think the would be
almost totally unreadable.
And, in fact, you'd be right. A short random sample of what you
would be faced with if you tried to read this story:
"we started kissing again this time my hands coursed through your
front slipping under your bikini top for a second....just
brushing with your nipples, then pulling out."
If you're desperate for a romantic pool-side romp, then maybe
you'll want to struggle through this story. Otherwise, try
something else.
Rating: * *
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{ASSM} Private Dancer (MF) Subway series #6
By theGreatxIam <max_wojtylak@yahoo.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35959
The main character in this theGreatxIam has lost the love
of his life, and he spends his sleepless nights rumbling through
the city on the nearly deserted subway trains. The couples who
share the subway cars are the worst at rekindling sad memories,
and on one particularly difficult night, the tears flow.
But a kind lady notices his grief, and when the train
finally empties out, she treats him to a private dance that he
won't soon forget.
Most theGreatxIam benefit from pristine writing and
sparkling clear action, but this does not measure up to the
author's usual high standards. I found several typos and
grammatical errors, and the shift to present tense for the big
sex scene jarred me.
I suspect my rating reflects a disappointment that my high
expectations were not met. But it's still a good enough to
recommend, although not as highly as this author's other stories.
Rating: * * *
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{ASSM} DOUBLE D's DERRIERE DELIGHT
By Evan Karpel <evkarpel@attbi.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35974
A woman at a strip club is giving a businessman a lap dance.
Despite her aggressive grinding in his lap, he never gets a hint
of an erection. She is doubly surprised when he gives her a big
tip.
When she's done for the evening, the approaches the stripper
in the dressing room. For a thousand bucks, she agrees to go with
him to his hotel room.
And when they get to the snazzy hotel, things get weird.
While the is readable, the writing is clumsy. We are told
the woman's bra size several times, which is several times too
many. When the sex starts, the writing improves somewhat, but as
the wraps up, it's back to the awkward phrasing and stilted
dialogue.
The should probably have a "caution" code, but
because the is so unrealistic, it's hard to be squicked by
it.
Rating: * *
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{ASSM} I'm Talking To You
By Alan C. McDonald <alaricmc@btinternet.com>
http://assm.asstr.org/Year2002/35976
This clever chronicles a man's voyage through a sexually
explicit website. He enters, he looks through the galleries, he enters the contest for a free visit from the
website's fantasy babes, he gives them his credit card
information ...
Oops! So this is why you should never give your credit card
information to anyone you don't know!
While there isn't much sex, it *is* funny, and it is well worth
the short amount of time it will take you to read it.
Rating: * * * *
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